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Originally Posted by BlackMorningRibbon__X
This is just something... Just a precursor of something so I don't know if the intro is interesting enough but just let me know what you guys think!
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A *New Message* link appeared on my Myspace and of course, I had to read it.
[Hey, what's up? I see your from Nashville too, well i'm just looking to make friends so reply if you would like to meet up sometime because you look pretty cool.]
Well , he was pretty cute, I won't lie, so I clicked reply.
[Hi  My name is Ashley, what's your name? Yeah, actually I live like 30 minutes from Nashville but sure... I wouldn't mind meeting you...]
I figured I'd probably never have to talk to him again , not to mention, come on, it's MYSPACE. But how wrong I was because the next day he replied.
[My name is Nathan but you can call me Nate, how about we meet up at starbucks near downtown at say... 4 tomorrow? I'll be waiting.]
What do I have to lose?
Everything. |
As far as the bolded items go, I fixed everything. As far as the underlined parts go, pick one or the other, both makes it redundant.
As far as the piece goes, waaaaaaaaaay too short for me to know pretty much anything about the piece except it takes place in possibly-modern Tennessee.
I'll need more before I can make anything conclusive, but this is probably a romance, which is a needle in a stack of needles here on BR. I'd like to see more before I say much else, but I'm willing to give it a shot.