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Old 02-12-2005, 08:48 PM
Hey nice story. It is really good so far. Keep up the great work and post soon.

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Old 02-13-2005, 02:26 AM
Chapter 2 - The Fake Truth


Ashamed of showing her pain Alexia whiped her tears and rushed to class.
As she enters the classroom, Jack walks toward her but then Drake suddenly pops out right infront of her.
"Hey baby, you looking fione today."
then he gave her the glare which meant that she had to follow his lead or else.
"hey hon, you dont look bad yourself." It hurt her just to call him hon.
"haha i see you still wearing the necklace i gave you last night" It was a black heart crystal, with a tracker inside of it so he would know where she was all the time.
Alexia walks to her seat and Drake slaps her a$$.
"YOU JER--"
"AHEM do you have something to say?" and he gave her that glare again
"no."
"no?" he gave her his wink as in to say something sweetlike to him.
"no hon, nothing at all."
As she walks to her seat he whispered in her ear, "good girl."

Jack stares in astonishment lost in his thoughts. She'd never let a guy touch her like that, what the heck was going on?
And what's with the hon? And that necklace of hers, a black heart? How absurd.
I thought she was over Drake and she hated him, I guess I'm just not good enough for her.
Right when he went to talk to her the bell rang and it was time for class.
The rest of day he saw Alexia hanging with Drake

After school Jack rushed over to Alexia and grabbed her by the arm.
He took her to the park where they met.
"Look Alexia I know what we had was over, but can you just stop avoiding me and tell me the truth?"
"I have to go"
"Alexia JUST LOOK AT ME IN THE EYES AND TELL ME THE TRUTH and dont lie to me, I jus want to know why you broke up with me and what's going on with you and Drake"
"YOU HAVE SOME NERVE JACK!, ugh.. look the truth is I MOVED ON OKAY!? I DONT LOVE YOU ANYMORE, I'M WITH DRAKE NOW AND I'M HAPPY OKAY!? NOW LEAVE ME ALONE!"
And with that Alexia left with tears while Jack stood there confused.
Alexia knew what she said had hurt Jack really bad but she couldn't tell him the truth or who knows what Drake would do to Jack.
Even if it meant for her to have to be with Drake for the rest of her life, at least Jack would be alive, I'll have to stay like this no matter how much it hurts them both.

Drake ran to Jack to point out a few things.
"Look leave Alexia alone, she doesn't want you anymore so just step."
"I wasn't trying to make her uncomfortable I just wanted to know why she broke up with me"
"All you need to know if she's over you so back off"
And with that Drake went to Alexia to comfort her.
"Hey I'm sorry."
"You don't need to take pity on me, you're already hurting me by making me do this."
"Is it really my fault I still love you?, I'm sorry about what happened when we were together the first time, I didn't mean to hurt you"
"Then why are you doing this to me Drake!? If you don't want to hurt me why are you threatening me and making me be with you when I still love Jack?"
"Because I need you."
"WELL I DONT NEED YOU!"
"Watch your tone deary, you don't want me in a bad mood now do you?"



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Old 02-13-2005, 02:37 AM
stupido jerk. :grr: how dare he! what a posessive lil jackass...

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Old 02-19-2005, 03:03 AM
omg dat stupid guy threatening her!!!dat is so mean i think she should tell Jack the truth cuz he'll still be hurt if she doesnt tell him and dat f*cking drake can go f*ck himself cuz alexia shouldnt be scared of him she should stand up for herself!!

update please! sorry i was cursing but i was telling the truth

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Old 02-22-2005, 04:14 AM
Chapter 3 - What's next?


Alexia ran home and when she got there she went straight to her room.
Good thing her mom worked until after midnight or she'd question Alexia about school and everything or how's it going wit Drake.
Alexia fell asleep for a while but her cell phone woke her up.
Her best friend Erika was calling.
Normally she wouldn't pick up because she's so sad but she needed someone to talk to.
"h..hello"
"hey Alexia how come you got back with drake? I thought you loved Jack."
"I do"
"then why'd you get back with drake?"
"It's a long story."
"that's okay I have time, now spill"
After about ten minutes Alexia was done exlaining everything to Erika, then continued their conversation:
"Alexia you should have told me sooner! we have to tell the cops."
"NO! if we do then he'll hurt Jack."
"But if you don't then he'll hurt you and sooner or later he'll hurt Jack either way."
"I don't know what to do."
"Well first off TELL JACK THE TRUTH!"
"I can't, I can't even talk to him not after what I've done to him."
"He'll understand just tell him!"
"Erika I'll call you back someones at the door"
She went to the door but when she opened it she closed it right away in shock.
It was Jack.
"Gosh he never gives up does he?" she thought to herself.
"Wait what am I doing, this is my chance to tell him everything, I just hope he understands, but then what's next?"
She opened the door once again and this time she invited him inside.

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this Chapter's shorter sorry, but I'm gonna try to make the next one better
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Old 02-22-2005, 04:24 AM
yeah!!!! do u now how long i waited for an update? okay maybe it wasnt long but i think u get the point. hope u update soon!!!

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Old 02-23-2005, 12:40 AM
Chapter 4 - The Truth


"Jack look I'm sorry for what's been going on it's just that--"
"Alexia you don't need to make an excuse, just tell me why you broke up with me."
"Tell me why you left me after promising you'd never leave."
"Tell me why you got back with Drake after he hurt you."
"And tell me why you don't love me anymore, if you don't want to tell me the rest that's fine just tell me what I did wrong and why you fell out of love with me."
"Jack I never fell out of love with you, I still do."
"Then why'd you leave, do you know how much it hurt?"
"Yes I do, Jack the truth is I never wanted to leave you, I never wanted to get back with drake, and I never meant to hurt you."
"Then why did you do?"
"I'll tell you but you have to promise to keep quiet about this, don't tell anyone, promise me you won't tell anyone."
"I promise."
"The thing is Drake threatened me."
"What!? what did he say?"
"He said that if I didn't break up with you he'd hurt you bad."
"And that I'll probably never see you again, that's why I did all this to you, I'm so sorry."
"Alexia no, don't be you should have told me sooner."
"Alexia I love you and I always will, you didn't have to do this."
"Yes I did, even though it meant that we'd both get hurt because at least I'll see you still."
"Alexia we need to tell someone we can't just leave it like this."
"NO! look it's okay I can stay like this, I don't want you to get hurt."
"But you can't let him do this it isn't right, Alexia just--"
Jack got cut off by the banging of the door. Alexia got scared so she didn't open the door.
The banging wouldn't stop, then the door broke down.
It was Drake.
"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING!? I TOLD YOU TO STAY AWAY FROM HER!"
"ALEXIA YOUR COMING WITH ME"
"HEY DON'T TOUCH HER!"
"Who says?"
"I do."
Then Drake's group came and got hold of Jack before he could stop Drake.
"DRAKE STOP! LET GO OF ME! JACK! HELP!"
Drake carried Alexia to the park and then slapped her.
"WHAT DID I TELL YOU ABOUT BEING NEAR JACK HUH!?, NOW YOUR GONNA REGRET IT!"
"DRAKE NO PLEASE!"
"B*TCH! DONT TELL ME WHAT TO DO!"
Then he slapped her again.

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Old 02-23-2005, 02:00 AM
:grrr: :grrr: :grrr: :grrr: HOW DARE HE TREAT HER THAT WAY!! she needs to go to self defense lessons and kick his sorry bajooty out of there!

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Old 02-23-2005, 03:16 PM
OMFG THAT B*TCH HOW DARE DRAKE DO THAT TO ALEXIA!!!!!! :angry: HE SHOULD GO TO HELL!!! :angry:

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Old 02-23-2005, 06:40 PM
OMG DRAKE IS A f*ckIN BASTARD HE SHUD GO TO HELL!! THEY SHOULD OF TOLD THE COPS ON DRAKE ._. =x sorrie widd the curses

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